On Santa frogs, creepy dolls, and questionable turkey
recipes
I've come across some interesting things while packing up my
house to get ready to move. In looking through conference notes, I saw this
quote from Isaac Asimov:
"The reader will remember not the phrase, but the
effect it has. If the phrase does not have an effect on the reader, change it
or cut it."
I don't know what conference presenter relayed the quote to
us, and I couldn't confirm that was the exact quote or find where Asimov said
that, but that's what I scribbled down at the workshop, so let's just assume he
did say something like that at some time.
'Cause I think it works really well with sorting through ten
years' worth of stuff. Plus, deciding what to keep and what to throw out
reminded me of editing.
By some miracle of physics, the entire contents of one
closet filled up the living room. Not all of those things can be worth keeping.
What is this thing and why do I own it? It's-- a frog, I guess? Wearing a Santa hat for some reason. Maybe it's cute, but it doesn't elicit any warm feelings from me. There's nothing wrong with him, really. I love frogs. I love Santa. But the amphibious hat-wearer needs to go.
Maybe when you're revising a manuscript you'll find some
phrases or scenes that are like the Santa frog: nice, but they don't serve any
purpose. It might even be a favorite scene you've written. But does it advance
the plot? Will it have an effect on the reader? If not, there's no reason for
it to take up space. So, toss it out like 1997's tax receipts.
Some things worth saving have an effect on us, but not a
pleasant one. Like these gals:Yeah, I know. Lovely, right? Just the kind of thing a little girl would love to cuddle with before falling asleep at night. They live in a box in my closet. Yes, I do worry they will leap out and murder me in my sleep. But they're antique, and they were my grandmother's. So they will stay.
Some scenes are hard to write. I don't mean the writing
part, although that's hard too, but I mean because they're unpleasant.
Something bad happens to the characters we love. Maybe someone's broken his
heart, or punched her in the face. Or your character has lost her home, or her
family, his innocence, or everything he's ever loved. You've read books like
that, too; anyone who's read Laurie Halse
Anderson or Ellen Hopkins
knows about scenes that are hard to get through. We identify with the
characters and hate to see bad things happen to them, but that's part of their
story. And we remember them. They have an effect on us.
On to my favorite kinds of things to find:
That first paper is one I post on the refrigerator every November. It was a "How To Cook a Turkey" assignment my daughter had in 2nd grade. Is it well-written? Sure, for an 8-year-old, I think it is. Is the recipe accurate? I wouldn't recommend using it unless you want to spend Thanksgiving in the emergency room with all your family members. And the turkey's missing a foot. But after ten years, I still laugh when I read the instruction, "Bake for 30 minutes at 104 degrees." We're keeping the turkey.
The yellow paper looks like something the daughter drew at
age 2. I think it's a family portrait. Sure, our legs are attached to our
heads, but she could write "Dad." No one has
arms, but we have ears and knee caps.
When we look over a drafts of our manuscripts, we always find things that need to be rewritten. Maybe the words aren't exactly right, or the sentences are too wordy. There isn't enough detail, or there's too much. Or you're revising something you wrote last year, and you've grown as a writer since then, so you'd write it differently today. But the feeling is there. The scene has an effect on the reader. It isn't perfect, but it's worth keeping.
Thank you so much for visiting, Lynne! She included pictures with her post but I was unable to include them :( But please read her book and visit her twitter!
When we look over a drafts of our manuscripts, we always find things that need to be rewritten. Maybe the words aren't exactly right, or the sentences are too wordy. There isn't enough detail, or there's too much. Or you're revising something you wrote last year, and you've grown as a writer since then, so you'd write it differently today. But the feeling is there. The scene has an effect on the reader. It isn't perfect, but it's worth keeping.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'm getting a padlock for that box
of dolls.
Thank you so much for visiting, Lynne! She included pictures with her post but I was unable to include them :( But please read her book and visit her twitter!
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